I’m actually trying to get ideas with this. If anyone’s interested in collaborating let me know. I got the atmosphere I want, the mood I’m trying to get across, but I’m having trouble with a vocal melody. Got a basic idea (the thing I kind of hum at the beginning) but… it’s hard to explain; I’m not able to sing it for some reason. Anyway I’m posting for two reasons:
1) Is the mood palpable/is the emotion conveyed convincingly?
2) Any ideas for fleshing it out?
It’s a basic sort of blues-based progression but built around a B flat minor-ish chord I like a lot.