Noobie user tea-brown posted 3 comments!
The curtain has closed and dreams have set the stage
I’m killing time and time has its way
She moves so slow, she goes in reverse
There’s no writing on the wall
There’s nothing to rehearse
It’s not a query of a passing notion
It’s not the answer to a rhyme
I’m just sitting here
Killing Time
I don’t want to sit and watch the world go by
If your soul took a breath would it court me when I cry
Yesterday’s words got together to create
And now they bring an unknown fate
It’s not a query of a passing notion
It’s not the answer to a rhyme
I’m just sitting here
Killing Time
Commented: February 16, 2013 at 7:50 PM()
Welcome to the site and thank you for posting your song. Please note that our songwriters tend to reciprocate with comments and critiques. Expect to get out of this site what you put into it! Please provide at least 2 comments for each song you post. Looking forward to your participation and hearing your music. Hope you enjoy the site! Bob
Commented: February 16, 2013 at 10:54 PM()
vocal is buried. the song doesn’t seen to move, it all seems recorded in the same register. there’s no change to the chorus. i suggest listening the artist you see yourself like and study their songwriting
Commented: February 17, 2013 at 9:32 AM()
During the last couple of seconds of the song notice how the reduced dynamics of the guitar are no longer interfering with the vocals. The entire song needs to have this balance in the mix. In this type of song the vocals should be the most important part. Your vocals need to be crystal clear so we can get the message. It’s difficult to comment on your lyric writing when you can’t hear them. Posting the lyrics would be helpful.
Commented: February 17, 2013 at 12:30 PM()
Hmmm, I didn’t realize the vocals were so hidden. And I’ll definately post the lyrics. Thanks for your input 🙂
Commented: February 18, 2013 at 2:12 PM()
“I’m just sitting here killing time.” And he says, “I make time come alive.”
“If your soul took a breath would it court me when I cry” –great line!! Court you when you cry, court you when you laugh, court you when your sad, court you when you’re mad. . . Just thought I would throw that in there.
I really like the way the song made me think. You capture the mood of the song very well and the song did draw me in to it. Thanks for posting the song and lyrics. my ears aint all that great, so I really appreciate those who post lyrics.