LET IT RAIN

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9 Responses to “LET IT RAIN”

  1. Toney Wright says:

    there hasn’t been any activity her in a long while so, I thought I’d try to get some started.COME ON PEOPLE! POST SOMETHING!

    LET IT RAIN

    seems like everywhere I go
    I see the same charade
    there’s always someone crying
    because it rained on their parade
    I don’t waste my time worrying ’bout
    things beyond my control
    I just take what life throws at me
    and carry on with the flow

    you can live your life
    going against the grain
    but in the end you’re gonna find
    that’s it’s all been in vain
    I’m gonna roll me up a fat one
    and pour myself a strong one
    gonna sit myself right down
    and let it rain

    you worry about this
    and you fret about that
    you’re gonna get yourself all worked up
    ’til you have a heart attack
    whenever your skies turn grey
    you think your world is gonna end
    but, let me tell you brothers and sisters
    the sun will surely shine again

    you can live your life
    going against the grain
    but in the end you’re gonna find
    that it’s all been in vain
    I’m gonna roll me up a fat one
    and pour myself a strong one
    gonna sit back on my ass
    and let it rain

    you can live your life
    going against the grain
    but in the end you’re gonna find
    that it’s all been in vain
    so let’s roll us up a fat one
    let’s pour ourselves a strong one
    let’s all just sit right back
    and let it rain

    Toney N Wright

  2. gordsd says:

    Nice mix and arrangement. I like the feel of the song. It sounds like the vocalist takes the song really seriously because the slurs sounds like he just got done smoking a fat one and drinking a strong one! LOL!

    I like the tone of the geetar too. I know we are suppose to come up with critiques, but I like this one just as it is.

  3. Toney Wright says:

    LOL!! actually the slurs are normal for me. thanks gordsd. glad you likes it,Toney

  4. kbaseball says:

    sounds great. original and heartfelt vocals… got a little Jerry Jeff/ Kris Kristoferson feel. Would love to hear the chorus with a stand up bass/violin/female vocal. beautiful… but can be enhanced. nice work. keep making that great music, Toney. I’ll smoke one for ya here in Santa Cruz!

    • Toney Wright says:

      thanks baseball.yea it could use some enhancing. I just used a basic ride drum in there with no rolls. I didn’t want over do it. and the piano is a little repetitive but, I’m not much on the production end of things. a violin and female vocalist sounds good. thanks for your comment, Toney

  5. andyburr says:

    Nice job, Toney. I like the zen philosophy and the laid-back performance; in addition to the Jerry Jeff and Kristofferson feel mentioned, I hear a bit o’ JJ Cale. The piano sounds like rainfall.

    I think the V & CHO could use a bit of something more to differentiate one from the other. The extra chorus at the end may be more than is necessary. Now that I think on it, the CHO (or at least the first half of it) may make a better bridge; I like a short simple singalong chorus, something that hits heavy on the title, something like, perhaps: “Rain, rain, rain, let it rain; Rain, rain, rain, let it rain.” and maybe filled out with 2nd half of current chorus:
    “roll me a fat one
    pour me strong one
    sit right back
    and let it rain”
    (I removed extra words and changed “let’s etc” to something very direct and easy for listener to internalize and sing).
    Just one guy’s opinion! ;-)

    • Toney Wright says:

      thanks for you comment and critique Andy. your the first one to ever say anything about the Zen philosophy. I don’t know how I can differentiate th verse from the chorus more than I have. the chords in the verse are
      Cmaj7,Am7,Cm7 and G7 and it goes up in the chorus to Fmaj7,G7, cmaj7, twice and Fmaj7,G7,Cmaj7,Am7,Fmaj7,G7, Cmaj7. I don’t what else to put in there. thanks again for your comment,Toney

      • andyburr says:

        I wouldn’t suggest that you change the chord progression. Some change in instrumentation could help do the trick. But what would most help (IMO) is simplifying the lyric as I suggest.

        This shouldn’t be part of the chorus:
        “you can live your life
        going against the grain
        but in the end you’re gonna find
        that it’s all been in vain”

        Make this part into a bridge, just to be sung once in the song. Reasons I say this: A chorus should be simple, catchy, easy to identify with and internalize, easy to remember, easy to sing along with, and include the title. Often you’ll hear a title at the beginning and ending of a chorus. Seems to me the main goal of a chorus is to get an audience to sing along with it. I can’t imagine anyone singing along with the above stanza — is it something I (as average listener) can internalize and identify with and comfortably sing along with as my personal anthem? No — Partly because it aimed at someone else (“you”) and partly because it’s a little preachy and, frankly, a bit of a downer. But it’s easy for me to identify with the sentiment ‘let it rain’ (I’ll be fine)and the rolling and pouring (because I like to party, too!). I’m looking at it from the point of view of what I perceive as an average listener. If you simplify, you can appeal to a much broader audience. As is, it’s just not the best chorus it could be. Submitted with all respect to you for coming up with the song!

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