LET IT RAIN

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Toney Wright
Commented:  February 16, 2014 at 1:11 PM()

there hasn’t been any activity her in a long while so, I thought I’d try to get some started.COME ON PEOPLE! POST SOMETHING!

LET IT RAIN

seems like everywhere I go
I see the same charade
there’s always someone crying
because it rained on their parade
I don’t waste my time worrying ’bout
things beyond my control
I just take what life throws at me
and carry on with the flow

you can live your life
going against the grain
but in the end you’re gonna find
that’s it’s all been in vain
I’m gonna roll me up a fat one
and pour myself a strong one
gonna sit myself right down
and let it rain

you worry about this
and you fret about that
you’re gonna get yourself all worked up
’til you have a heart attack
whenever your skies turn grey
you think your world is gonna end
but, let me tell you brothers and sisters
the sun will surely shine again

you can live your life
going against the grain
but in the end you’re gonna find
that it’s all been in vain
I’m gonna roll me up a fat one
and pour myself a strong one
gonna sit back on my ass
and let it rain

you can live your life
going against the grain
but in the end you’re gonna find
that it’s all been in vain
so let’s roll us up a fat one
let’s pour ourselves a strong one
let’s all just sit right back
and let it rain

Toney N Wright

Nice mix and arrangement. I like the feel of the song. It sounds like the vocalist takes the song really seriously because the slurs sounds like he just got done smoking a fat one and drinking a strong one! LOL!

I like the tone of the geetar too. I know we are suppose to come up with critiques, but I like this one just as it is.

Toney Wright
Commented:  February 17, 2014 at 2:11 PM()

LOL!! actually the slurs are normal for me. thanks gordsd. glad you likes it,Toney

sounds great. original and heartfelt vocals… got a little Jerry Jeff/ Kris Kristoferson feel. Would love to hear the chorus with a stand up bass/violin/female vocal. beautiful… but can be enhanced. nice work. keep making that great music, Toney. I’ll smoke one for ya here in Santa Cruz!

    Toney Wright
    Commented:  February 17, 2014 at 8:27 PM()

    thanks baseball.yea it could use some enhancing. I just used a basic ride drum in there with no rolls. I didn’t want over do it. and the piano is a little repetitive but, I’m not much on the production end of things. a violin and female vocalist sounds good. thanks for your comment, Toney

andyburr
Commented:  February 18, 2014 at 12:04 PM()

Nice job, Toney. I like the zen philosophy and the laid-back performance; in addition to the Jerry Jeff and Kristofferson feel mentioned, I hear a bit o’ JJ Cale. The piano sounds like rainfall.

I think the V & CHO could use a bit of something more to differentiate one from the other. The extra chorus at the end may be more than is necessary. Now that I think on it, the CHO (or at least the first half of it) may make a better bridge; I like a short simple singalong chorus, something that hits heavy on the title, something like, perhaps: “Rain, rain, rain, let it rain; Rain, rain, rain, let it rain.” and maybe filled out with 2nd half of current chorus:
“roll me a fat one
pour me strong one
sit right back
and let it rain”
(I removed extra words and changed “let’s etc” to something very direct and easy for listener to internalize and sing).
Just one guy’s opinion! 😉

    Toney Wright
    Commented:  February 23, 2014 at 10:27 AM()

    thanks for you comment and critique Andy. your the first one to ever say anything about the Zen philosophy. I don’t know how I can differentiate th verse from the chorus more than I have. the chords in the verse are
    Cmaj7,Am7,Cm7 and G7 and it goes up in the chorus to Fmaj7,G7, cmaj7, twice and Fmaj7,G7,Cmaj7,Am7,Fmaj7,G7, Cmaj7. I don’t what else to put in there. thanks again for your comment,Toney

      andyburr
      Commented:  February 23, 2014 at 11:59 AM()

      I wouldn’t suggest that you change the chord progression. Some change in instrumentation could help do the trick. But what would most help (IMO) is simplifying the lyric as I suggest.

      This shouldn’t be part of the chorus:
      “you can live your life
      going against the grain
      but in the end you’re gonna find
      that it’s all been in vain”

      Make this part into a bridge, just to be sung once in the song. Reasons I say this: A chorus should be simple, catchy, easy to identify with and internalize, easy to remember, easy to sing along with, and include the title. Often you’ll hear a title at the beginning and ending of a chorus. Seems to me the main goal of a chorus is to get an audience to sing along with it. I can’t imagine anyone singing along with the above stanza — is it something I (as average listener) can internalize and identify with and comfortably sing along with as my personal anthem? No — Partly because it aimed at someone else (“you”) and partly because it’s a little preachy and, frankly, a bit of a downer. But it’s easy for me to identify with the sentiment ‘let it rain’ (I’ll be fine)and the rolling and pouring (because I like to party, too!). I’m looking at it from the point of view of what I perceive as an average listener. If you simplify, you can appeal to a much broader audience. As is, it’s just not the best chorus it could be. Submitted with all respect to you for coming up with the song!

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