My Money

Noobie user marandan
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My Money copyright High Logic Music 2005

They take my money… before its even mine
Give it to some bureaucrat sittin on his fat behind
He spends a hundred dollars… on a two dollar tool
What the hell is wrong with that ol’ bureaucratic fool?

Big Bureaucracy … not what it was meant to be
I thought democracy meant… that they work for me.
Well if that were really true… I tell you now what I would do
Have a big party and raise a glass…
and tell them all they can just kiss my ass

my money… my money…

buys a $500 dollar toilet seat
a bunch of supersonic planes so sweet
puppet regimes and caviar
and smart bombs smarter than we think they are

my money… my money…
what’re you doing…with my money?

They’re sending my money… to places I can’t pronounce
Then they let drug lords sell it back to us by the ounce.
Wouldn’t it be smarter to feed the hungry and the poor…
In our own country first… how much more can we endure?

Big Bureaucracy … not what it was meant to be
I thought democracy meant… that they work for me.
Well if that were really true… I tell you now what I would do
Have a big party and raise a glass…
and tell them all they can just kiss my ass

They’re paying farmers NOT to farm…
And maniacs NOT to disarm
My money be safer in pickle jar…
and nobody’s asked me shit so far….

my money… my money…
what’re they doing…with my money?

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14 Responses to My Money

Great song – the lyrics are perfect. The levels all seem good. Love the guitar tones. Nice.

Jeremy
Commented:  April 21, 2013 at 3:43 AM()

FANTASTIC music and lyrics… I would love to record it!!!

Toney Wright
Commented:  April 21, 2013 at 6:15 PM()

Great song!! both the music and lyrics are very good, reminds of something Dylan would write. good job!!

marc lee
Commented:  April 21, 2013 at 6:17 PM()

good tune, good message? well done!

rllewis999
Commented:  April 21, 2013 at 7:16 PM()

Good song. Very pleasing to the ears. Has a great message to it for many people to relate.

marandan
Commented:  April 22, 2013 at 9:46 AM()

Thanks for the kind words. This is one of my protest songs… and there is so much wrong with our government, in my humble opinion, I had to reel myself in a bit. LOL.

imagineyes
Commented:  April 22, 2013 at 12:35 PM()

I was sent a request to review this.

The song is too repetitive, goes on too long without enough of a break – bridge, middle 8, release – and is not fresh. And the lyrics? Your point is well taken but poorly said. Not only that, but you’re not paying enough attention to your sentence construction. For example, the words of your lyric – “I thought democracy meant… that they work for me. Well if that were really true… I tell you now what I would do Have a big party and raise a glass… and tell them all they can just kiss my a**” – if analyzed objectively, actually say this: “If democracy really was working for me, I’d tell them to kiss my a**.” I’m sure that was NOT your intended meaning.

    marandan
    Commented:  April 22, 2013 at 12:58 PM()

    man, do you over analyze things. Without getting into things too deeply, my intention WAS to tell them they could kiss my ass, as in show them the door… BECAUSE they are doing a shitty job… in my humble opinion, of course. As for your comment about the song being too repetitive, you’re just looking for eggs to throw… there is only one section that repeats and its a chorus that repeats only once. Not enough in some people’s opinion. Thanks for listening though.

      imagineyes
      Commented:  April 22, 2013 at 6:02 PM()

      When you respond with, I’m “just looking for eggs to throw,” to me, you’re saying, “There’s nothing wrong with my song; you’re just dredging up a baseless criticism.”

      OK, that’s fine. But know this: you don’t want critique, really; you want your ego stroked. The fact is, however, that you’ll never get any better as a songwriter if you don’t get AND EMBRACE honest feedback. Oh, and if you REALLY want an evaluation of your song, take it to a publisher in Nashville or New York or LA – and when you do, I’d be interesting in hearing what kind of feedback you get in THAT arena!

      If you wonder, here’s is an example of a song I’ve written: http://imagineyes.blog.com/2011/01/12/hard-lesson-a-tune/

        marandan
        Commented:  April 23, 2013 at 2:05 PM()

        I am open to constructive criticism, that’s why I posted it. I just don’t agree with your criticism. It makes no sense to me. Your opinion is yours. You don’t have to like it. But mine is mine… this song has received some pretty positive feedback everywhere I’ve sent it. Which includes my publisher (Winston House in LA). Oh, I’ve been a published BMI songwriter since the mid-90’s. My publisher has listened to this song and did have some constructive things to say. Being too repetitive wasn’t one of them. Look, there are many people in the world who write songs of all kinds. Just because you’ve written some songs and you feel good about them, doesn’t make you a songwriting expert. You can have constructive and helpful things to say about another writer’s song without sounding like a know-it-all, pompous ass.

        Jeremy
        Commented:  April 24, 2013 at 3:06 AM()

        1st off Mr. Imagineyes, based on your link, you and your brother seem way too close for comfort. 2nd, by your own words, your brother did all the work on your ‘tune’, so I didnt bother to listen to his work since he is not here to defend it. 3rd, do not come on here giving opinions when you dont have the balls to post your music here for use to evaluate.

        I agree that you were looking for ‘eggs to throw’. Your nitpicking was far to cerebral to not have been planned and deliberate. It felt like an attack to me as well from a non-posting keyboard warrior that is upset that his brother has all the musical looping and sampling talents in what seems to be a very close family.

        To disassemble another lyrics is not a critique in my opinion, it is not your place to interpret his words for him, that is an a$$hole move.

A little too political for my taste but pretty good song. Has good hooks and clever lyrics. I can relate to the message. I disagree that the lyric about kissing your ass doesn’t make sense. makes sense to me. The only suggestions I have are maybe you don’t need that flanger on the acoustic guitar. Theres a lot of effects on the guitars and that may be overkill. I also thought the line about smart bombs smarter than we think they are was confusing. Thats all. You might revise that lyric. nice work!

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