Me and You

Noobie user renips
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It has been a while since I have been on this site. I am starting to write for my next CD so I figure I would post some of my ideas. If anyone feels inclined to provide any feedback that would be welcomed. If not just enjoy :).

The song is called Me and You. This really happened so the story depicts that evening. Oh and December in Florida was a bit chilly that night LOL

Lyrics

December chill it was in the night

The bar was closing down

The stars were out

And the moon was bright

We spoke with each other

It was out of sight

How many times

All over the world

Do people share a moment or two

Like me and you

Her hands were warm

And her smile bright

I told her a joke

And she laughed all right

Her eyes they sparkled

Like a warm bright light

There was magic in the air

And we shared it all night

How many times

All over the world

Do people share a moment or two

Like me and you

The bar went dark

It was time to leave

As we walked outside

there was a cool evening breeze

We got to our cars

And we shared an embrace

I kissed her on the cheek

And we went our separate ways

How many times

All over the world

Do people share a moment or two

Like me and you

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9 Responses to Me and You

clintsythe
Commented:  January 30, 2013 at 10:29 AM()

Cool. Nice tune, good production. Can the pick noise of the arpeggio guitar be reduced?

The song did draw me in. The way you shaped the mood with your voice and style. I do not say that about many songs. I get bored easy. So the beauty of it caught my attention! I can hear, like clintsythe says, a sound like the pick is scraping a string on the up stroaks, but I usually don’t point out a “little” dirt in a recording–especially with guitar–cuz many of us (me especially) play kinda crudely anyway. I think your voice and style sounds like Joe Walsh–especially in the chorus; I just thought I’d throw that in there. I thought the lyrics were a little predictable, so you might (if possible) add/change something to make the story less common. But like I said, as it is, the beauty of the production and the mood might be enough to just be satisfied with it as it is.

Thanks for taking the time to listen. The squeak is actually the flesh of my fingers on the steel strings. I finger pick and use the fleshy part of my fingers. It has that effect. I have not figured a way of getting around it. When I try to dial in the frequency I inadvertently kill off some mid range and high end but the squeak still is present. If anyone knows a way to eliminate it I am all ears. Now having said that I have gotten used to it and when I fingerpick it has become sort of a trademark when using my dreadnaught. When I use a pick it is not present but for some finger picking I like to use my fingers.

The lyrics actually describe what happened when I met someone recently at a bar. It is a real story. We are dating now LOL

I love Joe Walsh and you are not the first one to make that comparison. He is one of my favorite artists.

kessmonsters
Commented:  February 2, 2013 at 5:46 PM()

good idea i like your production. the line “it was out of sight” seems kind of cheesey to me. all in all a good idea, although, i think i would take a long hard re-write just to fine tune your lyric. good luck. mk

Mark, nothing not to like here! Beautiful tune! Bob

andyburr
Commented:  February 11, 2013 at 9:55 AM()

Especially like the chorus! Agree that the extra string noise is a distraction — not the left-hand finger-sliding sound, but the crickety sound that accompanies almost every 1/8 note (? I’m not sure) of the arpeggio. Is that really from your right-hand fingertips?

Yes it is really from my right hand finger tips. I am going to try a light lubricant to see if that helps. Most listeners do not notice but those with big ears hear it. I hear it. Would prefer not to have it but it is an organic thing I guess. Physics!! Friction and the like.

alkomusicman
Commented:  February 12, 2013 at 10:00 AM()

Nice production, especially liked the vocals and picking. I also liked the bongos in the background. At times it seemed that the guitar lines were not together, but for the most part, they sounded together. Nice organic song.

Chuck Sweitzer
Commented:  February 18, 2013 at 10:54 AM()

I think that the string “noise” adds to the organic feel of the piese. You could minimize it by not using so much compression on the guitar track. I can’t tell if it’s on the track itself or in the mix. I don’t find it annoying, just part of the sonic landscape.

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