Underground

Advanced contributor spadanny
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Blew out the candels turned out the lights
For forty days and forty nights
Thats how long its been since she took the light away

And Im going down
where crying doesnt make a sound
Down in the underground
the underground
Underground

Out there the world goes by my door
And I don’t raise my head up anymore
I want nothing ever again to do with that sweet misery

Im going down
where crying doesnt make a sound
Down in the underground
the underground
the underground

I’ve seen a darkness you people will never know
I’ve been down to the bottom of a bottomless hole
Cause I miss her.
Yeah I miss her
oh I miss her

And I’m going down
I won’t be coming round anymore
I’m going down
I’ll see you on the other side

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7 Responses to Underground

clintsythe
Commented:  January 5, 2013 at 10:55 AM()

Cool. This piece certainly gets it point across.

Rembow
Commented:  January 5, 2013 at 12:40 PM()

Awesome. Really liking the chord sequences and strings. Nice guitar tone too. Lyrics are the only thing I would work on a little but they’re pretty good as is.

ina_catalog
Commented:  January 5, 2013 at 3:05 PM()

Nice song. Very catchy and a good concept. Maybe I would recommend stripping it down instrumentally, sinking with a rougher voice to get the hurt feeling across, and isolating some of the guitar at times. I really liked the way the final verse was played more passionately. I think the whole song should rock this hard or be stripped down completely to just you singing and a few basic accompanying instruments.

LJ
Commented:  January 6, 2013 at 1:36 AM()

LOVED THE LAID BACK BEGINNING UNTIL :42 WHERE IT PICKED UP AND THE INSTRUMENTS BLENDED SPLENDIDLY, I WOULD RECOMMEND MORE BACK UP VOCALS. ALSO I WOULD TRY MORE OF A GRAVEL VOICE ON YOUR PART AND BRING THE STRINGS UP A LITTLE. COOL, COOL, COOL! I COULD LISTEN TO THIS AGAIN, AND AGAIN AS IT IS BUT TRY SOME OF THESE OTHER SUGGESTIONS.

    Thanks for the feedback! Some others have mentioned the gravel voice idea. I’ll definitely experiment with that. I kinda thought the stoic delivery was poignant but a Leonard Cohen thing might work too.

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